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FIClet: Riley / Graham gardening
Class is . . . well, I'd like to say it's a waste of time, but I've rediscovered the delicate art of taking notes simultaneously with writing porn, so I figure that grad school has its uses.
Apparently, my muse and my libido are directly connected, because I've been fantasizing up a storm. I'm waiting for the CLex muse to return, but for now? Riley and Graham are keeping the brain busy while the professor drones on.
Riley with the arms and Graham with the hands . . . you know they'd barely leave my bedroom if I had anything to say about it, two beautiful men chained and writhing, hot and panting for it, for each other.
Maybe I'd let them out once in a while, to do some chores or something. Yardwork. Yeah. On a sunny day in late April, working up a sweat in the garden.
( Last night's fic snippet, Riley/Graham. )
Hm.
Why am I not happy with this?
Maybe it's the verb tense.
Can anyone provide me with some feedback on this snippet, and possibly some suggestions for improvement?
Apparently, my muse and my libido are directly connected, because I've been fantasizing up a storm. I'm waiting for the CLex muse to return, but for now? Riley and Graham are keeping the brain busy while the professor drones on.
Riley with the arms and Graham with the hands . . . you know they'd barely leave my bedroom if I had anything to say about it, two beautiful men chained and writhing, hot and panting for it, for each other.
Maybe I'd let them out once in a while, to do some chores or something. Yardwork. Yeah. On a sunny day in late April, working up a sweat in the garden.
( Last night's fic snippet, Riley/Graham. )
Hm.
Why am I not happy with this?
Maybe it's the verb tense.
Can anyone provide me with some feedback on this snippet, and possibly some suggestions for improvement?
